Books I bought:
And Falling, Fly
Terry Brooks book on writing
Ray Bradbury book on writing - for blog giveaway
a nice blank page notebook with tree on cover - for blog giveaway
So, when my blog gets 50 followers, I have something to giveaway.
Now to the other topic.
So, I signed up for the pg/mg love scene blogfest not long after finding it posted in the blogworld. It seemed fun and more like something I could handle in comparison to the fight scene blogfest. But I have no understanding of pg/mg and even had to ask what mg was. So, even though I have a scene, I don't think it quite qualifies. I didn't understand what did, so went with whatever I wanted. I do not write under 16 having sex and won't. I have teen characters, but they don't have sex young. It's hard enough pulling off a gay scene that would be allowed for a younger audience, adding an even younger character would almost disqualify it at once. Not fair but right now, that's how things go. And I'm writing a novel with college age characters for MarNo. So, I used my Hero book which is not middle grade, or even YA. I focused on having the language so that it is possible to understand what is going on without being erotica graphic. With all that said... guess I should post the scene now. At leasst I tried.
Excerpt from "Hero":
Energy ebbed and flowed within Noah, swirling in choreographed dances that had been perfected over time. He kept most of it deep within and made sure the sparks that escaped didn't enter Bastian as they lay together, intertwined. The only sounds that filled the room was the labored breaths of the two and the occasional crack of a spark that sizzled in the air during brief seconds of excitement. Each movement, the gentle caressing of skin, and tender kisses pulled from desired lips tingled with bliss.After almost an hour, Noah collapsed on the bed beside Bastian, exhausted. As he struggled to calm his breathing, he pushed the excess energy into a special stand he'd created. It was from an insulation material that would handle energy without causing a full on power shortage or a small fire. That done, he settled back and allowed himself to cuddle up closer to Bastian without fear of shocking him.
16 comments:
You know; this was a hard challenge. To write love from a PG/MG POV. I mean, as a society, we frown on child pornograpghy.
Your scene is definitely PG, and very well written. I enjoyed it very much, and the opportunity to meet a fellow blogger.
..........dhole
Your description was beautifully vague. Loved it!
This reminds me kind of Mercedes Lackey's Last Herald Mage series. Ever read it?
Well done! I agree, a difficult challenge, but well met.
Ah, nice! Man. I can NEVER get fantasy elements to work in shorter pieces. I mean, even if this is an excerpt from something longer, it totally works with the energy stuff right from the get go.
Very cool =)
I love the swirling release of energy. Really intriguing and lovely writing!
Beautiful I loved the small details you did include like the labored breaths.
I had wondered if anyone was going to attempt a same-sex scene! Nicely done. I agree it would be extremely difficult to write such a scene with younger characters, if not impossible. But you stuck to the PG-rated language :)
Love your details in a small excerpt. Great job!
I think I have that same book on writing by Terry Brooks, "Sometimes the Magic Works". It is an interesting book, but may have only been so because I was crazy about the author at the time. Not sure how much I learned about writing from it, but it was an interesting read. :)
Really loved the swirling energy and how he contained it afterward. Niiiice. Beautiful job.
I don't read much fantasy, but this totally intrigued me. Great detail and ambiguous enough we can only guess at the age of the couple - well done!
Beautiful details here and a very well-written piece. Well done. :)
For anyone that looks back on this: Thank you for your support. It's so encouraging to get this many responses to one post and I appreciate every one.
Very interesting entry. I really liked having to contain the energy without causing a fire. HA! Good scene.
Very PG and beautifully written. Nice job! I'm sorry I didn't get to your post sooner!
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